• @[email protected]
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    145 months ago

    Really great and I want to share with my wife, but I sent her, “The Day Of Our Divorce Hearing” post from the other day without thinking and she got all upset. This poem sneaks in, “… and I was about to leave you”, so I think I’ll just write this comment instead.

    • @BonesOfTheMoonOP
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      55 months ago

      Oh no! I’m so sorry. I’ll find some love poems for you to read her.

      • @[email protected]
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        65 months ago

        Aw thanks, that’s so nice; I’ll keep my eyes open. You always post great content, by the way, and thank you for getting me interested in actual poetry via your posts on this sub.

        • @BonesOfTheMoonOP
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          55 months ago

          Thank you for appreciating them! I always liked poetry but until Lemmy I had never taken quite such a deep dive. There’s some absolutely fantastic modern poets.

  • @Senshi
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    115 months ago

    At the risk of outing my ignorance: what makes this a poem? I have a hard time reading it with “rhythm” because it lacks rhyme, and the line breaks seem almost arbitrarily meaningless as well.

    I feel it is much closer to a “plain” parable, but I’m really not versed in literary science.

    • @isles
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      25 months ago

      I’m uncouth too, because this just seems like extra line breaks to make it “poetic”. I don’t mind the parable, though.

      • @Senshi
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        35 months ago

        Oh, I actually like the story as well, it’s well written and provokes thought and reflection, which makes it very laudable.

        I am just genuinely curious if I missed something in terms of classification.

    • @codfishjoe
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      15 months ago

      My understanding is that to be poetry it tries to evoke the emotion captured in an experience. Frequently this is accompanied by rhythm and measure but certainly isn’t a requirement.

  • Electric_Druid
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    75 months ago

    Wow. Short, eloquent, impactful. Excellent.

    • @BonesOfTheMoonOP
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      25 months ago

      I like poems of all lengths but when you can pull off a short one that hits like this, you’re very talented.