• moosetwin
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    5 months ago

    aside from the issues that other commenters have addressed, I think the titles are too short to accurately describe the subject matter

    I can see what they were going for but the titles do not match the paragraphs well enough for me

    misleading titles, for things presented as myths, (with corrections in parenthesis):

    • Multiple personalities (exists as MPD)
    • The Vomitorium (exists)
    • Black holes (exists)
    • Different tongue parts (exists)
    • Left & right brain (exists)
    • Evolution is a ‘theory’ (true)

    I’d write these as:

    • Schizophrenia does/should not mean multiple personalities
    • People did not vomit in vomitoriums
    • Black holes are not literal holes*
    • The tongue does not taste in distinct places
    • Both brain hemispheres can learn the same functions/talents
    • Evolution matches our current data the best; scientific theories are not just conjecture**

    *I don’t think this is really correct either, but that is an issue outside of the scope of just the titles

    **I am not too confident on this rewrite, I’m not sure I could make it short and have good quality, but you could go with either side of the semicolon for a shorter single title

    There were other issues I had with the titles, but I felt that I was too unsure about them to present them here