So I made this cover letter and thought it showed I’d be dedicated to their field and wanting to learn. While have experience and schooling in certain fields that may benefit their business. Then that I am really good with customers?
Though I showed my mom and grandma. My mom owns a photography business and my grandma used to do interviews for churches. My grandma said that it is absolutely amazing and perfect. While my mom simply just say don’t use it but literally won’t give any explanation into her thought process… so please can anyone let me know, would this be good to use for a job application or to take into the interview?
To be harsh: if I read this cover letter, I would throw away this application, unless those named people are personal contacts and I could ask them about you.
The last two sentences of each paragraph say the same thing, and as someone else said, are weak.
Your very first sentence reads to me that you are looking for a jumping point to launch into other careers, and that you don’t intend to stick around in this company you are applying to. No thanks.
“My aspiration is to make the most of my abilities while helping as many people as I can.” This is one of those filler, vague statements that basically contains no useful information and only exists to lengthen your letter.
Details of your work experience should be in an attached resume. You could pick out one or two points and state how it will specifically benefit this company.
As mentioned above, don’t include those names, unless they are known by the reader.
The info in the second paragraph is mostly fine, though condense it and try to be more specific about how your studies will improve their product. Something like… “My recent study of [specific field of psychology/sociology] has taught me that people react well to [specific about something that improves trust] and are more likely to trust an advertisement that [does this].”
The purpose of a cover letter is not to vaguely reiterate info in your resume. You want to connect with the reader and show them that you are interested in THEIR team/company. It seems like this is a marketing/advertising company. Be specific! Write your cover letter so that it only applies to this specific company. Point out one of their specific projects that you like and how your background/skills can create a similar/improved product. Research the company and say something about the company and how you think you would fit well on the team.
Follow the advice of givesomefucks and format it as a professional business letter. This should also include the company address at the top, as well as your contact/address at the top. Search for business letter templates.