The awfulness of the story aside, I do want to put a small bit of appreciation toward ABC News for not dropping some bullshit like “17-year-old man dead following an officer-involved shooting during a welfare check.” The voice is passive still, but at least it cuts to the point, that the kid was killed by a police officer.
My only notes are that it should say “Officer shot and killed 17-year-old while conducting a welfare check.” As it is, it’s like it’s saying the kid was shot and killed, and it just so happened to be by an officer.
The awfulness of the story aside, I do want to put a small bit of appreciation toward ABC News for not dropping some bullshit like “17-year-old man dead following an officer-involved shooting during a welfare check.” The voice is passive still, but at least it cuts to the point, that the kid was killed by a police officer.
My only notes are that it should say “Officer shot and killed 17-year-old while conducting a welfare check.” As it is, it’s like it’s saying the kid was shot and killed, and it just so happened to be by an officer.
I think the news would have to put allegedly in there somewhere.
No ‘allegedly’ required in the passive version, so not required in the active version
‘Allegedly’ is not required because they are quoting the state police: