• Katana314
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    20 hours ago

    This came up in a brilliant way in a manga I was reading.

    Two combat pros are facing off in a back alley, the aggressor trying to “test” their victim. The loser protagonist, who’s useless in a fight, hears the altercation from his store job, and rushes out to help his friend. He throws a paint bomb, used by stores to identify robbers, at the assailant.

    The assailant runs, and spends the rest of the issue in a panic about how to conceal the paint; since they’d very much been relying on the option of being able to sneak out through crowds.

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      21 hours ago

      less pronouns, more well-defined references please. I had to read that last paragraph three times before I understood who you meant by “They”.

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        20 hours ago

        Thanks for the feedback. Been working on creative writing recently, and it helps to know when my attempts at brevity are making things unclear.

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          20 hours ago

          You’re welcome, “the assailant” is much more clear now :) (I mean - as clear as it could be)

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      1 day ago

      …So Flock cams need laser projectors, and they can just mark criminals with a big red X as they drive around. Maybe a different color for whatever they’re wanted for. And then let the vigilanteism fly!