#Choose where to read—it’s free.) https://lnk.bio/23off_Sugar

I spent 130+ hours on this chapter.

Unlike the previous parts, this one has a lot of conversational scenes, and I’d really like to know how naturally they come across.

Or do they feel cringey?))

Anyway, don’t hesitate to point out anything that feels off.

I’d also really appreciate your thoughts on the visuals. Some backgrounds are missing, but unfortunately, that’s an extreme measure I’ve had to take to save time.

  • JigglySackles
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    5 days ago

    Love that shot you’ve linked. Very cool. I’ll give it a read. 🙂

    • 23off_SugarOP
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      4 days ago

      Thank you so much—please do let me know what you didn’t like!)